Sting RPGs
Jun 4, 2016 1:50:03 GMT -5
Post by evktalo on Jun 4, 2016 1:50:03 GMT -5
Typo etc nitpicks:
In the intro: “health dose” -> “healthy dose”
In the “page header” box for page 1, Solid Runner and Treasure Hunter G is in the wrong order.
Baroque:
“In the west, "Nerve" more often refers to emotions or physical reflexes rather rather than brain activity in east.”
“rather rather”. “in east”->”like in the east”. I would also decapitalize "Nerve" there.
I do remember Baroque getting rather low reviews while still sounding interesting. This article definitely increases the interest. I’m left wondering how the Windows games were released. Are they free or paid? Download or retail?
Evolution:
“isn’t very good as it” -> “isn’t very good at it”
Evolution: Eternal Dungeon additional screenshot captions say “Solid Runner (Super Famicom)”
Riviera:
“has last his memory” -> “has lost his memory”
Yggdra Union:
Both Yggdra Union and Knights in the Nightmare are praised for being the best of the Sting RPGs. If KITN is a better game, the “by far the best game Sting has produced thus far” sentence in the YU article could be tweaked (perhaps “has”->”had”).
Knights in the Nightmare:
“power power” -> “higher the power” (I think)
“An interesting aspect to this is race and relationship play a factor into this” I think adding “that” to “to this is THAT” helps readability.
Similarly, “You can also just rid of any unit” I feel it’d read better if it was “just GET rid of”. edit: Actually, I think "get rid of" would be grammatically correct here.
“Hermits are all female and use daggers, which both their law and chaos attacks sweeping to their sides.” -> “which”->”with”
“There's only new item in Yggdra's Path” -> “There’s only ONE new item in Yggdra’s Path” ?
Really cool sounding games, almost every one of them sounds worth checking out. Good articles then, in that they raise your interest in them.
In the intro: “health dose” -> “healthy dose”
In the “page header” box for page 1, Solid Runner and Treasure Hunter G is in the wrong order.
Baroque:
“In the west, "Nerve" more often refers to emotions or physical reflexes rather rather than brain activity in east.”
“rather rather”. “in east”->”like in the east”. I would also decapitalize "Nerve" there.
I do remember Baroque getting rather low reviews while still sounding interesting. This article definitely increases the interest. I’m left wondering how the Windows games were released. Are they free or paid? Download or retail?
Evolution:
“isn’t very good as it” -> “isn’t very good at it”
Evolution: Eternal Dungeon additional screenshot captions say “Solid Runner (Super Famicom)”
Riviera:
“has last his memory” -> “has lost his memory”
Yggdra Union:
Both Yggdra Union and Knights in the Nightmare are praised for being the best of the Sting RPGs. If KITN is a better game, the “by far the best game Sting has produced thus far” sentence in the YU article could be tweaked (perhaps “has”->”had”).
Knights in the Nightmare:
“power power” -> “higher the power” (I think)
“An interesting aspect to this is race and relationship play a factor into this” I think adding “that” to “to this is THAT” helps readability.
Similarly, “You can also just rid of any unit” I feel it’d read better if it was “just GET rid of”. edit: Actually, I think "get rid of" would be grammatically correct here.
“Hermits are all female and use daggers, which both their law and chaos attacks sweeping to their sides.” -> “which”->”with”
“There's only new item in Yggdra's Path” -> “There’s only ONE new item in Yggdra’s Path” ?
Really cool sounding games, almost every one of them sounds worth checking out. Good articles then, in that they raise your interest in them.